Short story workshopped

My writers' group workshopped my short story last night and gave me some ubber-helpful comments. My main tasks in this revision are:

• Make the dialogue more distinct to the characters
• Get the themes straight from the beginning
• Make Harold and Susan's relationship progress a little slower so as to be more realistic.
  

OK, I've got my marching orders, now I just have to figure out how to march!

But the best part of having the story workshopped was learning that, for the first time ever, I've created a short story that actually ends! Whoo-hoo!