Friday, March 30, 2007

Deepest, darkest

When I saw this week's href="http://sundayscribblings.blogspot.com">Sunday Scribblings topic, of course I thought of "secret". But I didn't want to be that obvious. So I let my mind ramble, and I came to this woman. Thought I'd share her character sketch.

She's sitting at a cafe, drinking black coffee and watching people duck under
the awning outside to escape the rain. She thinks how cozy they look,
all huddled together like people looking share some experience. She's
young, 30ish, with straight black hair like Elvira. She's taking her afternoon work break, escaping the squeaking of the photocopier and the insistent cough of her office mate.

She likes her desserts dark and rich. Coffee, chocolate, cake. She
threatens one day to open a bakery called the Deepest Darkest. It would
specialize only in things she loves. Her boyfriend says that that's
what's wrong with her: that she's egotistical enough to think that
anyone else would care about a whole store that caters just to her
desires. She thinks egotism is underrated. If she's not going to make
the world conform to her needs, who will? Best Blogger Tips

15 comments:

Rena said...

I like this piece! Deepest, Darkest would be a great name for a chocolatey bakery. Besides, confidence is knowing that if you like something so much, probably someone else will too.

FatCharlatan said...

Ooooh. Me likes this. A LOT. Keep going--I want to read what happens!

chiefbiscuit said...

I love the voice in it and the descriptions of the little things - like the squeak of the photocopier, the work-mate with the annoying cough and people ducking under the awning ... a delicious little piece of writing - sounds like you could go on adding to this one.

TI said...

I want to read more...it's fascinating to watch your process. What a fantastic take on the prompt.

Crafty Green Poet said...

Well her boyfriend obviously isn't very perceptive, I think it would appeal to lots of people....

Chelle said...

My guess is that the boyfriend may soon be an ex. Nice story.

paris parfait said...

Aha, a woman who knows what she wants and is determined to get it! Great character image you paint.

Regina Clare Jane said...

Boyfriend's gotta go! I really like her determination!

Tori said...

I love this character and the words you choose. I would love to be a regular at deepest darkest!

Mardougrrl said...

What a great sketch...tells so much with just a few telling details.

And I would visit Deepest Darkest. :)

Patois said...

Soon-to-be-ex-boyfriend, right? And nice name for a shop.

gautami tripathy said...

She should make her dreams come true. Let "deepest, darkest" thrive!!


gautami
Stranger in the Mirror

Repeater said...

Great work, bug. Nice moving away from the obvious.

Deb G said...

I'd be a regular at Deepest, Darkest. I like your post. I confess to sitting in cafes wondering about the people sitting around me....

Chloe Blackwood said...

Really like this. Fascinating. Want to find out more about her definitely.

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