I need some clarification as to what she expects out of this revision (ie, how much do I need to change for it to count as a new submission?), but here's what I think I need to do at this point:
- Add more of a crisis point. I think I can do this by taking into account some of my mentor's other suggestions, including:
*Create a better balance between the two plots: Harold and Susan's problems with her husband. I can do this by clueing the reader in to the husband problems much earlier on than I do now, and by introducing the idea of a deadline to figure out her marriage earlier.
* Bring the father into the story more.
*Develop all the secondary characters more.
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Yea! Sounds as if all your hard work is paying off! Congrats...and best of luck as you work on the revisions! :)
What a great experience to KNOW that you have made progress. You're working hard, and for sure changes are the result of making a regular practice of writing. Have fun with your revisions, Bug! TI
Thanks to you both! Let me know how your revisions go!
Sounds like you're on the right track. I hope you'll eventually post some of your work online.
Congrats!
Keep the momentum going. These are great comments that are specific and can really help your piece be strong. Yay!
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